If you want an honest opinion, some acting/hosting lessons would help out. It felt like you were holding your breath a bit and were a bit nervous. Loosen up, have fun with it, that will translate to the audience having more fin with it. There were moments that you would stumble on words e.g. when you said "concepts" at 0:52. Did you have a take where that line worked better? Also, there was a lot of fumbling with the mic. None of that should be in the audio. There were also a lot of awkward pauses in the narration. Cut out some air in that which will make the dialogue flow better.
As for the shots, the concept car shots were pretty repetitive. To make things more interesting, take a look at some of the British Top Gears. Even with a stationary car, they use a variety of lenses and angles to keep things interesting. A shallow depth of field and getting really close up to the car with a rack focus can be fun to play with.
The opening shot doesn't feel like it has anything to do with the car and is a kind of odd slightly upshot showing acoustic tiles and florescent lighting. Think a little more about composition and what we are seeing in the background, as well as lighting. Florescent office lighting is really not ideal and should be avoided. I'm not saying you need to get a lighting package or anything for this, but go outside during golden hour or find some tungstons and get a little lighting going on. Make sure you get some light into your eyes. This overhead lighting gives dark eye sockets which doesn't look too good. Let people see your eyes so you can look alive and connect with the audience. Maybe start with a wide and go in tight. Don't zoom. Make a hard cut to a medium or medium close up.
I'm not trying to dog you, just trying to give you a few pointers for the next one.
